The planet's population is reaching unsustainable levels, and people are facing shortage of resources like water, food and fuel. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

These days, in comparison
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last
decade,
population
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grew up rapidly. Many governments face to
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problem about it in their countries. Increasing
population
is become
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a really important and critical issue for them. Because they should provide basic and main
necessites
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necessities
of life for their people.
Also
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they have to invest a lot in housing and creating
job
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jobs
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. Obviously,
this
issue exists not only in developed countries but
also
in developing countries. In my point
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,
Population
growth seriously should be
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by the
government
. In
this
essay, I will examine about
effect
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the effect
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of
population
on our world and
then
propose some solutions.
Firstly
, global warming and air pollution
is
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caused by
increasing
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of
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population
. Global warming and air pollution lead to
destruction
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the
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environment .So they can affect to producing
food
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of food
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and many resources.
For example
, burning fossil
fuel
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fuels
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and exhaust smoke make to production of acid rain which can pollute water and soil and
harmful
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to health.
Secondly
,
lack
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the lack
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of a suitable house or job for people and especially adolescents
are
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the other main
problems
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for the
government
. One of the best
way
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that the
government
can control
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growing
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of
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population
is
,
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the
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families who want to have more children should be paid more tax than
the
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families
have
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just one child. In conclusion,
although
, giving birth
children
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to children
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is the right of all humans obviously, providing food, water and many facilities for living and protection of the environment are important and vital too.in my point view is the
government
should encourage people to
having
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less
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children.
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