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Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
technology
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 considers an important part of
kids
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' classes
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 as laptops or desktops and there are many pons and cons to
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 them.
This
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To begin
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 with,
technology
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 has In dispensable
rolls
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 in
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's lives and helps them a lot in the education process and has many advantages.
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, the
computers
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 make the lessons more enjoyable and save the time of lessons,
also
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 save the effort because the
kids
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 do not need to carry abg to school, the teacher can use
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 in the way of learning the
kids
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.
As a result
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 more and more education organizations now used
computers
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 in classes.
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,
technology
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 brings disadvantages to the
children
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's lives.
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, the
children
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 now spend huge time on
computers
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 playing games or chatting with their friends.
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, the
technology
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 may dispense the teacher rolls and a lots of people will lose their jobs and that will affect them and the
kids
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 may take the classes
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 the home and the face to face learning will be lost and I think that important part of education and form the personality of
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 and the interaction with their friends will be lost.
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consequently
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 that will affect
chldren's
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children's
 learning. In conclusion, I believe that
computers
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 play
Indispensable
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 role in
children
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's lives,
also
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 the
kids
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 who can decide how to use the
technology
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 in their studies or waste their time on the internet.
Additionally
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, the disadvantages of
computers
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 are more than the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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