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You see an advertisement for a course and would like to enquire about it.

#advertisement #course #enquire
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you about an advertisement I read in the Melbourne weekly magazine, regarding a requirement to babysit a child for six months. Kindly consider
this
 letter as a written application for the
job
. I am extremely eager to take
this
job
 because I am looking for avenues to support myself financially while completing my medical course. I was working in a restaurant for
past
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 year, but my contract with my landlord is expiring in the
next
 two months. With
this
 ,
job
 my financial and living problems will be resolved together.
In addition
, your house is close to my college which will save my commuting time. I believe I am best suited to
this
job
 because I am a medical student and have a younger sister who is 10 years old. Due to my knowledge in medicine, you can rest assured that I can quickly attend to minor injuries or cuts that inadvertently happen to a child while playing.
Furthermore
, I am trustworthy and have good experience how to care for a small child. I have taken care of my sister several times when our parents had to go out of town. In my free time on most weekends, I will be either studying or spending time at my friend’s house. During the holidays I will certainly explore Australia and visit famous places with my friends. I would like to start as soon as possible. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. You can reach me on my mobile number for any urgency: +919825848019 Yours Faithfully, Karan Kulkarni
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