The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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, the advancement we achieved in
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technology
improving our lifestyle day by day .
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science
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a very important role in human
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and makes
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easier.
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, in medical sector become advanced nowadays and the patients get
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the new discoveries
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medicine
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thousands of lives.
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thousands of people dieying
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in other sectors but after the discovery of the antidot which became
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life
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saver .
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, the advancement we achieved in
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sector helped
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humanity to increase their
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knowledge
and helped them to improve their lifestyle .
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the discovery of
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helps
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to predict the weather and upcoming threats
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japan is based on
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a long time but
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the invention of earthquake machines and
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the help of
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satellites
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they predict before
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reaching to their
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area's and they shift their people to save places by that they saving millions of lives every year in
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world. In conclusion ,
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, it has been proved that science plays an important role in human
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and helps them to make their
life
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easier and safe.
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