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exposure to international media like T.V, flims, magazines etc, has had significant impact on local culture. Do advantages overwright the disadvantages.

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With the advent of technology,
people
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 in a country are able to understand the cultures of different countries as they are able to watch
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international movies and access diverse media channels broadcasted from all over the
world
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.
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 has a significant impact on the local
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.
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, I believe that
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 would have more merits than demerits which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. To commence with, the fading of local
culture
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 is being accelerated by the emergence of foreign media including films.
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, the local languages are slowly dying as
people
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 are heavily exposed to the international channels as a routine. To exemplify, the younger generation
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 more interested in watching Hollywood movies and
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 they are using
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 dialect more often than the local languages in their conversations.
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, children are not getting an opportunity to watch the native channels that can imbibe native traditions and
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 through the mythological stories
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 as the Mahabharata and the Ramayana.
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,
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access to the global
culture
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 has its advantages in
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world
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 where the borders are becoming abstract. While
people
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 are crossing countries either physically or virtually,
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 knowledge about the foreign
culture
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 can be very useful in the interactions and conversations with the
people
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 abroad.
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, In a workplace, the person who belongs to India
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 is working with another who belongs to France, would be able to connect easily in the conversations and build
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 network. Henceforth, it can help progress the work faster. In conclusion, even though the native
culture
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 is slowly vanishing due to the awareness of global
culture
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 through the international media, it helps in building social networks and
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 easier communication with
people
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 all over the
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. So, I believe that it brings many advantages for the future generations where the
world
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 is connected unlike before.
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