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There aren’t many houses to accommodate people so it has several social consequences. Only the government can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Houses
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 to accommodate the community have become less available over the
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 few years
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this
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 has become a huge
problem
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 with several social consequences. Can the
government
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 help to overcome
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problem
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 I will explain how the
government
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 can solve the accommodation for all the community.
Government
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 can solve the housing
problem
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 for the
people
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 in a number of ways. The
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 thing that they have to do is to set a law that you can only have one child while
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 low-cost housing is the
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 option. Cheap
houses
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 can be built whereas
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 will
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 help to create job opportunities for the
people
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.
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 will not only help
people
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 afford
houses
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 but will
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 help with poverty and social consequences. There is a number of
people
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 who still believe that the
state
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 cannot help with the housing
problem
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. When your
state
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 is not involved in the community
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 will cause huge problems because the
people
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 need the
state
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's support. Without the
government
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houses
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 will not be built
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, taxes will still be paid but will be used for other things. If not new
houses
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 are built there will be too many
people
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 living in one house and,
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 will lead to overcrowded
houses
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 and
people
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 will not be happy.
Houses
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 to accommodate
people
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 have become less available over the
last
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 few years and have led to several social problems. In my opinion, the
state
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 needs to build
houses
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 for the
people
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 rather than building a new road because
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 will help with social consequences.

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