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Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 the gender issue has a huge transfer these days, still, some people think that
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 are born to be more aggressive than
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. To extend my view,
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 essay will elaborate on the physical and mental aspects to discuss
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 issue.
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 with the physical sentiments,
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 are naturally stronger than
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, which means that males can build muscles easier and faster than females, and males are talented to be more powerful than females. Of course,
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 can definitely get the same power as
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 through training. Following the context,
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 kind of natural difference makes
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 more competitive.
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, boys would like to play sports games rather than indoor activities. Because those games are a competition, and the triumph of the winner is meant for the boys.
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, these physical differences simply lead to social gender stereotypes. On the mental aspect, there are lots of experiments and accounts that claim
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 are more rational, calm, and self-unconscious, and
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 are more sentimental, emotional, and self-conscious. To illustrate, the time that male managers use to lay off a colleague is shorter than female managers. I fully agree with those statistics, the only thing we need to consider is the individual difference. Unfortunately, the public is often overlooked,
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 it contributes to serious disputes and conflicts. To conclude, if we think deeper and organiser,
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 are literally born to be more competitive than
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 in either body or spirit. By and large, I agree with the perspective of the natural differences, in the meantime, we should realize that competitiveness is a personality ,not a judgemental standard.
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