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With an increasing population communicating via internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become thing of past. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#population #internet #text #face #communication
It is true that some
people
 may
consern
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concern
 about
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 decline of tet-a-tet
communication
the
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next
 few years with the reason of technological progress. While I believe that the
Internet
 will never vanish personal
interraction
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interaction
, which is the main source of positive emotions and personal
wellbeing
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 of humans. On the one hand, there is no doubt, that due to
advancement
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 in technologies the modern generation has gained preferences in online
communication
 avoiding
to meet
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 in person. Nowadays,
people
 find social media as the most
convinient
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convenient
 source of
interraction
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interaction
 when it provides to stay in touch with friends from all over the globe.
Nevertheless
,
Internet
 has recently become
the
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 adverse source of
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 for younger
people
 who get stuck
on
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chatting with random partners and flicking through social media. That may provide
misleading
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sence
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sense
 of purpose and fulfilment and may reduce the desire for
face
 to
face
communication
 and intimate connections development.
In contrast
,
Internet
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 causes the
expanding
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 of personal leisure
time
 for
wide
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 range of employees who had to waste their
time
on
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commuting to an office for work meetings
last
 century.
Hence
, these years they
exprience
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experience
much
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 more flexible working schedule when workers can join the call online from home. Thereby,
this
time
 can be spent on family relationships and
carring
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caring
carrying
on
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 children,
that
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 widely increases
people
's quality of private
communication
,
although
, not quantity. Following
this
 advantage, it is anticipated, that
next
 decades the number of offline conversations will decline significantly, while the amount of
time
 spent on intimate
communication
 will go up. In conclusion, I would agree that social media
negaively
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negatively
 impact
people
's
face
 to
face
communication
 who
sick
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 with weak willpower and are not skilled in their
time
 management, while others will turn the
Internet
 into
beneficial
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 way for their timetable and qualitative
interraction
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interaction
 with social circle.
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