Task1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of

students

in the UK at England

university

Fix the agreement mistake

universities

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, peoples

were

Correct pronoun usage

who were

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able to talk

Change preposition

show examples

other

languages

between 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, a student who spoke

Spanish

only has the highest in two different years.

Additionally

students

have the same proportion in three different

languages

in 2010. Focusing on 2000, the proportion of British

students

able to speak other

languages

, and

undergraduates

who spoke

Spanish

only were the highest at one-

third

in 2000.

Moreover

students

who spoke

Spanish

had a higher than

students

have no other

languages

at 10%. Interestingly,

undergraduates

who spoke French only and another language has the same percentage at 15%.

In addition

, the German language only and two other

languages

have

students

spoke the same proportion at 10%. Turning in 2010,

undergraduates

who spoke

Spanish

only have the highest at 35%

in2010

Correct your spelling

in 2010

Furthermore

, those who spoke German only had a higher than

students

who spoke two other

languages

at only 5%.

However

undergraduates

have the same percentage of

students

who spoke

Spanish

only, French only, and no other language at 10%. in 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

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British students
university
speaking other languages
language proficiency
overall trends
comparison
2000
2010
chart
data
percentage
significant
increase
decrease
noteworthy
comparative analysis
improvement
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Task1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In some countries, more and more people are people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

Organised tours to remote places and communities are increasingly popular. Is this a positive or negative development for the local people and the local environment?