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Task1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Task1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of
students
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 in the UK at England
university
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universities
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, peoples
were
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who were
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 able to talk
to
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in
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 other
languages
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 between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, a student who spoke
Spanish
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 only has the highest in two different years.
Additionally
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,
students
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 have the same proportion in three different
languages
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 in 2010. Focusing on 2000, the proportion of British
students
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 able to speak other
languages
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, and
undergraduates
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 who spoke
Spanish
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 only were the highest at one-
third
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 in 2000.
Moreover
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,
students
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 who spoke
Spanish
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 had a higher than
students
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 have no other
languages
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 at 10%. Interestingly,
undergraduates
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 who spoke French only and another language has the same percentage at 15%.
In addition
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, the German language only and two other
languages
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 have
students
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 spoke the same proportion at 10%. Turning in 2010,
undergraduates
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 who spoke
Spanish
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 only have the highest at 35%
in2010
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in 2010
.
Furthermore
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, those who spoke German only had a higher than
students
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 who spoke two other
languages
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 at only 5%.
However
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,
undergraduates
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 have the same percentage of
students
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 who spoke
Spanish
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 only, French only, and no other language at 10%. in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, spanish, undergraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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