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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some populations think that
people
 have too many
choices
 that they can afford. I somewhat disagree that we possess too many options in our society. The main reason why I believe that owning
choices
 per person isn’t superabundant is that we have a lot of restrictions in our lives. Students in high schools can’t choose the university that they dream of, because in many countries, the resources of education are limited. Students have to participate in competitions to gain these kinds of opportunities. As far as the Chinese young generations are concerned, they can’t go to the cities that they hope to live in. The reason is that living in a big city puts too much pressure on young
people
. Prices of rent and transport are extremely high. Their salaries are relatively low compared to the cost in a big city.
However
, most students who have just graduated face the social problem that it’s too hard to find an adaptive job in a small city.
In addition
, nowadays, we surely have more options than the generation of our parents. But the number of
choices
 for most
people
 is reasonable, which means that there are just a small number of
people
 who complain that they have too many
choices
. The majority of society believes that they lack
choices
 and chances.
Furthermore
,
people
 have a great ability to adapt to a new environment.
Therefore
,
people
 are accustomed to having more options than before. In conclusion, we possess more opportunities and
choices
 than 20 years ago. But I’m convinced that the number of
choices
 is acceptable. Because there are
also
 too many limitations in society, and most
people
 are used to
this
 new situation.
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