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Internet has changed the way we interact with each other now compared to the past. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#internet
Nowadays, all of us have social networks and it is
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 good way
for
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communicate
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 with each other, but sometimes
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 we have
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in
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 the
internet
 might be wrong. In
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i
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 will demonstrate
advantages
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 and disadvantages of using
internet
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 from my
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 of view.
First
 of all,
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internet
intenet
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 is wage place where we can find a lot of things, starting from information to real friends. Many
people
 start their
relationship
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in
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 the
internet
, it might be
quiet
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 comfortable
,
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 because
people
 do not have to dress up or go to
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restaurant
.
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 the
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beginning
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 it is a
qood
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 opportunity to know each other.
Secondly
,
internet
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make
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 our life
more
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easier. Whereas, improving skills online more
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useful
 and popular in
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 generation, by video lectures, on the Youtube or just in the different platforms.
On the other hand
, not all information on the
internet
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 true, as
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not every person online may become
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 nice friend or love of life.
People
 shouldn't be naive.
Also
 now it is very common
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in
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 the
internet
 through advertising.
Moreover
, most
of
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people
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not
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depends
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on
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 the age addicted from
internet
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. it is a big problem, children now not playing in the
playgroud
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playground
 as before, they are sitting with telephone and
wathcing
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watching
 videos and playing videogames.
To
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 conclusion, in my point of
view
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 if
new
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 generation would use
internet
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 correctly, it is much of a danger.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • instantaneous communication
  • social media platforms
  • virtual meetings
  • e-commerce
  • global marketplaces
  • streaming services
  • online gaming
  • content creation
  • remote working
  • cyberbullying
  • internet addiction
  • access to information
  • professional development
  • privacy concerns
  • educational resources
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