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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planet to live such as Mars To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days, the existence of
life
in
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 other planets is heated controversy in the whole world. In the years to come, it is predicted that people’s
lives
 will seemingly face some difficulties on the earth. There is a common belief that more budget and funding should invest in investigating to find the possibility of
life
 on the alien asteroid. I am convinced that the critical environmental issues may lead individuals to live
other
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 planets,
thus
 it is essential to do research exactly. Indeed, individuals’
lives
 are involved in some serious environmental problems,
one
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 of the most critical issues would
deplete
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the
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of the
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 ozone layer. The number of means of transportation is increasing on the street
that
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and
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 these are emitting
the
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 huge amount of the pollutants into
air
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 daily.
Consequently
, it will apparently cause global warming and
also
 rising sea level, so inhabitants’
lives
 will be prone to
destroying
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destruction
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 on the current planet.
In addition
, farmers and manufacturers may bring about
the
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soil
 erosion. Heavy machinery like tractors which have been used for cultivation and
also
 cutting down trees by the large company can lead to
the
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soil
 erosion which is unsuitable for growing. As a consequence, these activities can ruin our earth that future generations for the rest of
life
 will have to need to live on an alien planet.
In addition
, spending money in order to study the existence of
life
 on other
plant
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plants
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 is crucial because scientists and pioneer companies would facilitate access to
this
 accomplishment. Take NASA as an example, has been investing a huge amount of money in
this
 innovative project that can find an appropriate
soil
 on the MARS to cultivate.
Therefore
, these steps can create a new way to live
on
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in
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alien
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an alien
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 environment. In conclusion, it is inevitable that our planet is overwhelmed with a lot of critical concerns
such
 as depleting
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer and
soil
 erosion.
Besides
this
, investing budget in
other plant
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another plant
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 will create an innovative way to preserve
new
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the new
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 generation’s
lives
 in the future.
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