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Band 4.5

Governemnts should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Over the past decades, the world has evolved substantially in terms of transportation. Nowadays, more railways have been used compared to
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roads because of their cost and adaptability. Some
people
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 argue that their governments should
use
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 more funds on the railway sector than on normal roads. I completely agree with
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 opinion, even though some
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 might have different aspects.
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 advantage of increasing funds on the railways. Before all else, it will lead to fewer traffic
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 and pollution in the cities if the government encourage its
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 to mainly
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 their commute on
train
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 service.
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, using public transport plays a pivotal role in today's energy-saving conversations.
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, the more
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use
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 public transport, the less carbon dioxide will be emitted from their individual vehicles,
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 as cars and motorcycles.
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, I would like to express an equal view that there are several drawbacks if the government focused only on the
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 lines.
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 in urban areas where the
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 services are not able to reach will have to confront massive daily commute problems. Despite the fact that the benefits of having
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good quality railway transport are undeniable, we may need to consider its implications for other areas, like the housing and real estate sectors.
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, the price of buildings and premises, especially
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 the
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 stations, will be raised enormously
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 the ease of transportation. In conclusion,
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 we have some disadvantages and weaknesses, I passionately believe that the development of public railways in a country will
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 a major impact in a positive way
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 the locals, especially the low and mid-income level citizens who do not have
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property
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 cars or vehicles for their daily
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph directly relates to the topic and supports the main argument.
coherence cohesion
Include a clearer introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points and express a clear position on the topic.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • commuter congestion
  • interconnectivity
  • public infrastructure
  • operational costs
  • mass transit
  • urban development
  • energy efficiency
  • socio-economic disparities
  • heritage railways
  • tourist attractions
  • environmental conservation
  • urban sprawl
  • renewable energy
  • high-speed rail
  • infrastructure investment
  • traffic management
  • public-private partnership
  • cross-country connectivity
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