You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing regarding the notice you have published in the magazine recently concerning your child’s caretaker. I am avid about having

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opportunity as I long for spending time with children and my major is relevant to them.

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, as I am a new dweller here, I have sought a career that gives me a place of residence. Well, I had worked as a

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caretaker in a kindergarten before I moved to Australia. Not only am I experienced in

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academically qualified as I majored in child psychology

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the university.

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many congresses about ways of treating and playing games suitable for children’s age that help them master their cognitive and social skills that are necessary for those who are going to attend school in the near future.

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, I surmise I would be able to nurture and establish a close connection with your child provided I was engaged. Concerning my spare time, I wonder if I could ask you about the attractions to visit in your town and go sightseeing as I am a new citizen here and I am interested in exploring new places. I look forward to your reply. If only I would be employed for

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career. Kind regards, Dorsa Shekofteh

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment

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