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The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The population growth in major cities and demand for houses has increased in parallel, which brings detrimental problems. It is said that just government can help to omit
this
 issue which I believe is the same for these issues.
People
 would not expand their families unless their city could support all the family members' housing. As long as
people
 could not find a city with large numbers of apartments or flats for their children to live in, they may not convince to bring their offspring.
Consequently
, governments should construct buildings to decrease public worries. Urban areas that are deprived of enough houses would not be enlarged in population;
as a result
, that country contains old society, and many economic problems would occur as well.
In addition
, if
people
 do not find any place to live in their city, they might immigrate to other cities or even other countries.
People
 employed in a new job, young adults,
in particular
, want to live in a suitable house; if they have faced not having a home, they will resign or change their living areas.
As a result
, that town lost its workers, so in my opinion, governments should make
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design a place that can include many residents;
moreover
, develop the suburb to encourage
people
 to live there to reduce problems. In conclusion, a shortage of living places stop families from bringing children and drops the number of jobs demanding, which hits the country's economic growth. From my point of view, governments must take actions to overcome
this
 issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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