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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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In today's modernized era,
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education plays
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 substantial role in training
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. It is argued by some folks that teachers do not have to give
children
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homework
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 in the schools, while others believe it plays
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 role in educating them.
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, I would like to shed light on my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, it has been said that instructors ought to avoid giving home practices to the
children
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. One justification often given for pupils
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not to do practices at home is that they are in the
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 period of their life,
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 they need more time for playing and enjoying their life except
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 the time they spend at
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 to say, when they are at
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 they are focused on their courses with accomplishing their exercises only in there in order to pass them with a high grade. Take Iran's educational system as the most patently obvious example,
children
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 have an obligation to carry out their work in the
school
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 so nothing will remain
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 their house.
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, some others think it is necessary for
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 to
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receive
homework
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 so as to be engaged with the studies they learnt in
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school
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, repetition in the exercises
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 pivotal role that may pave the path for coming successes in educational trend. More specifically, it not only is a desirable way for
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 who tend to achieve their goals but
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 it to be bound to result in flourished society.
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, doing
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 in the
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 places can bring both remarkable accomplishment and happiness for
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 and society respectively. In conclusion, there are
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controversial
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argument
 in the term of
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 whether it is important to be done or not.
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, teachers and authorities have responsibility for conducting
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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