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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
t is often argued that
great
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 way to solve
car
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the car
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 crowded and
pollution
 issue is to raise the
cost
 of
oil
 and
gas
. I completely disagree because that will affect the
people
 in many ways.
To begin
, increasing the price of petrol will affect the
people
 in many ways. To explain, that. The salaries are not high and the life is getting tougher so the individuals can't afford
spending
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 a lot of money to buy
gas
 and
oil
,
also
 the rise in
cost
 would affect the economy in negative ways,
such
 as the
people
 will boycott camping of petrol and no one will buy the
gas
 or
oil
 and that will affect the economy.
As a result
, in rising
cost
 of
gas
 and
oil
 have
negative
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effect
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affect
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then
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than
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positive
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.
Moreover
, there are several solutions to
car
 traffic and
pollution
 issue.
For instance
,
car sharing
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car-sharing
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and
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apply
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that
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apply
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mean
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means
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 more than five
people
 can ride
one
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car
 if they are going to the same place.
Furthermore
, the government can give some bonuses for
be
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people
how
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who
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 can convert their
car
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cars
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 to
electricity
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car
 and there are a lot of cars that work on electric power rather than
oil
.
Consequently
.
This
 solution will help to decrease
pollution
 and the traffic. In conclusion,
rise
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the rise
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 in
cost
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the cost
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 of
gas
 and
oil
 is not the best way to solve the
car
 crowded and
pollution
 issue because that will affect the
people
 and at
same
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the same
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 time the
people
 will stop buying petrol.
Additionally
, there are many solutions,
such
 as
car sharing
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car-sharing
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 and
the
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apply
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people
 start to consider covert their
car
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cars
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 to electricity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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