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"Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?"

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Nowadays, we live in an era advanced by consumerism in which whether following
fashion
 trends or not has become a debatable issue, especially, among the young generation. Some
people
 believe that pursuing
this
trend
 is a good way of improving
people
’s lifestyles, while many others argue that
people
 should dress in something more comfortable. I advocate the latter group at least for two main reasons elaborated below. On the one hand, some
people
 claim that, in
this
 day and age, wearing vogue clothes enhances their sense of pride and self-confidence. I personally believe that
this
 is more of a requirement for celebrities and famous individuals. But for the common
people
, the drawbacks of following
this
trend
 outweigh its benefits.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that
fashion
 is a changeable
trend
 by its nature.
Consequently
, following
this
 dynamic procedure costs heavily and wastes an individual’s money and time. As an example, one of my cousins allocates more than fifty per cent of his income to the latest attire
instead
 of saving it for his future life.
Moreover
, it should be mentioned that the main purpose of wearing clothes is to protect human bodies from different weather conditions rather than showing off.
For instance
,
people
’s clothes should illustrate their own personality and uniqueness
instead
 of mocking someone else who works in the film or
fashion
 industry. To be more precise,
people
 should appreciate their own tastes and beliefs.
In addition
, the predominant feature of
fashion
 is to be against the traditions and cultures of many societies. All in all, from what has been discussed, I agree in saying that
although
 pursuing
fashion
 might be a pleasant task for some
people
, it is an expensive and improper
trend
 in long run.
Submitted by nkamatam on

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