Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the modern world, caring about the traditional cultures of countries is a well-discussed topic. Some individuals think that keeping alive conventional cultures is still imperative. on the other side, opponents have thought it does not mean these days.
Based on some
citizen's
beliefs, Fix the agreement mistake
citizens'
Although
, maintaining conventional cultures is so difficult job, but
it is very critical due to two facts. Correct word choice
apply
Firstly
, people
think established
Correct article usage
the established
culture
of a region is their link with past
and if they forgot that, they would Correct article usage
the past
lost
their own. Change the verb form
lose
be lost
For example
, in Iran costumes
such
as Nowruz
holiday, is one of the most imperative Correct article usage
the Nowruz
event
for Change to a plural noun
events
Iranian
Correct article usage
the Iranian
people
. Consequently
, Iranian individuals try their best to keep alive their traditional region although
, they live in
everywhere. The other fact would be Change preposition
apply
prejudiced
. Replace the word
prejudice
It is
Correct pronoun usage
Is
last
but not least. The most
citizens all around the world have Correct article usage
Most
prejudiced
Replace the word
prejudices
on
their classical Change preposition
against
culture
and costumes
. The
example can be seen as African Correct article usage
An
people
, they have weird costumes
and some of them are cow worshipers and have prejudice
against that. Add an article
a prejudice
In addition
, they transfer their region to the next
generations in Africa.
In against side, opponents think in recent decades people
have not
motivation to continue established Correct your spelling
no
culture
. Moreover
, citizens do not care about their traditions and just focus on the future because they are less close with each other so, they do not speak and transfer their past. In addition
for new ,generations conventional culture
does not have any means. They would like new costumes
, for example
, Iranian individuals prefer to wear the latest model of clothes and think traditional clothes are old-fashioned.
In conclusion, in my view, it is really imperative and vital to maintain established culture
because without the past we lost our own.Submitted by TUTOO on
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