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More and more work is being carried out by machines in all areas of our lives. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In the modern world,
Machines
 play an important role in almost all sectors.
This
 topic is becoming increasingly important and has gained much more scholarly attention.
Although
, replacing human workers with
machines
,
this
 transformation does more harm than good or vice-versa is a debatable issue.
This
 essay will discuss the merits and demerits associated with both. A number of benefits can be attributed when the
work
 is performed by
Machines
 as compared to Humans. To support it, I can say, the invention of
machines
 has proved to be a very useful tool for all areas of life.
For instance
, with the use of the
Machines
 now
work
 in the manufacturing sector
are
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 performed much more efficiently, error-free and in less time compared to the olden times.
Moreover
, the
Machines
 help the big manufacturing organizations in saving labour costs.
For example
, the recent report of the cold drink brand, Pepsi states that 80% of their
work
 have been replaced by
machines
 in the year 2021 as compared to 2011. As every positive comes with some sort of negative, there are some demerits as well.
First
 and foremost is with the growing use of
Machines
 in every sector has adversely affected humans to lose their jobs. The
second
 considerable reason is the
Machines
 are expensive to install and it requires continuous power to function which costs a lot of money. To conclude,
although
 the use of the
Machines
 has some legitimate concerns, we cannot dismiss the deluge of benefits it offers to make our life easy and convenient, so I believe the
Machines
 should only be used for a difficult or risky
work
 while other sectors should be taken care by humans.
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