Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
City
life
comes with benefits and drawbacks. The predominate
side is variable Correct your spelling
predominant
person
to person. Change preposition
from person
Main
harm of Correct article usage
The main
city
life
is mostly health
issues for some groups. Health
issues may come out to the surface not only does it occurs with just psychically disorders but also
happen with mental problems. Besides
, most of the modern districts where wealthy people
lives chokes with hazardous releases of chemical gases and elements.
Admittedly, modern life
altered individuals’ daily life
routines, concerns about future
, career ambitions, etc. Intense Correct article usage
the future
level
of stress reasons may lead to mental or psychical Fix the agreement mistake
levels
problem
eventually. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
Moreover
, in comparison with the rich people
, the mass who earn middle or low income to stay good health
statue
can be more challenging Correct your spelling
status
especially
in developing and undeveloped countries. Citizens of those countries are forced to Add the comma(s)
,especially
immigrating
Wrong verb form
immigrate
urban
areas indirectly Change preposition
to urban
as a result
of; living difficulties in rural areas.
Subsequently
, there are many facts that affect residents’ health
directly. To make profit
and compensate Add an article
a profit
city
needs, facilities produce Change preposition
for city
Add an article
a product
the product
product
, and Fix the agreement mistake
products
this
process leads to Correct article usage
the reveal
reveal
of some sort of chemicals as Change the verb form
revealing
a
waste. Those chemical wastes Remove the article
apply
spreads
to the different locations Change the verb form
spread
of
the as a gas or as a waste material blended with the water source. Change preposition
apply
Nonetheless
, factories not
Add a missing verb
are not
only
pollution source Correct article usage
the only
of
cities. Change preposition
for
Individualistic
side of carbon Correct article usage
The individualistic
food print
can not overestimate. Correct your spelling
foodprint
People
tend to use plastics for every kind of item. Thus
, those illogical habits pollute the soil. Moreover
, transportation usage rare
Add a missing verb
is rare
around
Change preposition
among
people
who owns
a vehicle.
In conclusion, I believe Correct subject-verb agreement
own
city
concept damaged our instinctive spirit of Correct article usage
the city
life
. Intense immigration level improves releases of harmful material to the cityside as a result
of nonstop
working environment. Add an article
the nonstop
a nonstop
Hence
, fatigue from hard work puts people
in mental danger.Submitted by ardacelik98 on
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