Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

City
life
comes with benefits and drawbacks. The
predominate
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side is variable
person
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to person.
Main
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The main
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harm of
city
life
is mostly
health
issues for some groups.
Health
issues may come out to the surface not only does it occurs with just psychically disorders but
also
happen with mental problems.
Besides
, most of the modern districts where wealthy
people
lives chokes with hazardous releases of chemical gases and elements. Admittedly, modern
life
altered individuals’ daily
life
routines, concerns about
future
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, career ambitions, etc. Intense
level
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levels
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of stress reasons may lead to mental or psychical
problem
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problems
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eventually.
Moreover
, in comparison with the rich
people
, the mass who earn middle or low income to stay good
health
statue
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status
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can be more challenging
especially
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in developing and undeveloped countries. Citizens of those countries are forced to
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urban
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areas indirectly
as a result
of; living difficulties in rural areas.
Subsequently
, there are many facts that affect residents’
health
directly. To make
profit
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and compensate
city
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needs, facilities produce
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a product
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product
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, and
this
process leads to
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reveal
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of some sort of chemicals as
a
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waste. Those chemical wastes
spreads
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to the different locations
of
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the as a gas or as a waste material blended with the water source.
Nonetheless
, factories
not
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only
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pollution source
of
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for
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cities.
Individualistic
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side of carbon
food print
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can not overestimate.
People
tend to use plastics for every kind of item.
Thus
, those illogical habits pollute the soil.
Moreover
, transportation usage
rare
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around
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people
who
owns
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a vehicle. In conclusion, I believe
city
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the city
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concept damaged our instinctive spirit of
life
. Intense immigration level improves releases of harmful material to the cityside
as a result
of
nonstop
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the nonstop
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working environment.
Hence
, fatigue from hard work puts
people
in mental danger.
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