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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty yearsthat many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is ? what measures can governments take to discorage people from using their cars?

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In the
last
 three decades, it is not uncommon to see a significant rise in the
number
 of
cars
 in the
cities
 which has led to huge
traffic
 congestion. I believe that
this
 notion is true.
This
 essay will discuss the various measures by which the government can mitigate
this
 issue.
Rising
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A rising
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number
 of
people
 are buying vehicles,
this
 is largely due to better affordability. To elaborate, these days
people
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people's
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 standard of living in
cities
 has improved drastically which has made them capable of buying
cars
.
For example
, due to a boost in
economy
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the economy
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 in India, every family residing
at
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in
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 New Delhi
,
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 has more than one car in their house.
Therefore
,
this
 has made a surge in the
traffic
 congestion by threefolds on roads. One of the best
way
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ways
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 by which
this
 situation can be addressed
by
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is by
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development
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the development
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 of
excellent
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an excellent
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 public
transport
 system by the government.
This
 is because due to lack of the public
transport
 individuals are enforced to
use
 their
cars
. If better commute facilities,
such
 as buses and
train
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trains
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 will be available for the public, they will be motivated to
use
 them as they are more economical and convenient. To illustrate, in South Korea, due to
well established
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well-established
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train
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trail
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 system, most
of
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apply
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the citizens prefer to travel by them because it saves their invaluable time
of
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commuting and money.
As a result
,
people
 are less interested to
use
 their own vehicles.
In addition
, the government should move the car parks of crucial public
building
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buildings
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 and shopping centres
in
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to
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 the outskirts. In
otherwords
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other words
,
this
 will discourage the
people
 to
use
 their private
cars
instead
 they would prefer
public
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the public
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transport
 system.
Consequently
,
this
 will reduce the
number
 of
autombiles
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automobiles
 in
cities
 and will eventually solve the problem of
traffic
 jams.
For instance
, many South Asian nations followed
this
 approach and gained paramount success in curbing
the
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traffic
 congestion. In conclusion, In my opinion
number
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the number
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 of
cars
 has increased drastically during the
last
 thirty years.
However
, the
goverment
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government
 can tackle
this
 issue by improving public
transport
 and building car parking
of
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in
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 major public buildings outside
cities
.
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