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Inventors are not as important as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#inventors #doctors
In
this
 contemporary
world
, technology is changed
human's
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 lifestyle enormously.
Public
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argue
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 that
doctors
 are more essential to our community rather than scientists or new designers.
However
, in my perspective, I believe both groups are more and more important
for
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in
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 our lives. In
this
 essay, I will focus on how inventors and
clinicians
are become
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become
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 most valuable in our lifetime.
To begin
 with, in
this
 machinery
world
, there are
abondond
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abandoned
 machines and electronic gadgets
such
 as mobile phones, vehicles and so on. Wherever
,
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people
 have
accee
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access
 to do any kind of works within a less time because of designers. Since,
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advent
badvent
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 of the technology, human beings used computer science to
fulfill
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 their purposes.
For example
, in 2005,
a
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 American survey was conducted and declared that 80% of university students
are
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used computers and laptops to do their assignments and other
study related
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 activities. Due to inventors, wherever we can make our
life
 in
a
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an
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 easy way. Even if there is
nor
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no
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 plane or ships, still we cannot acquire international businesses
such
 as import and export goods, to gain international business partnerships among other countries. Whenever
,
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 we have sources to communicate with
people
 who live in different destinations
in
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 the globe. Particularly, If there is no scientists l, our society will not develop without new inventions.
Furthermore
,
doctors
 are the one of
main
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person
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people
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 in our lives , as long as
people
 trust them because they give
life
 when
we
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caused by deadly diseases.
Ford
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person
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the person
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 who
was
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faced
accident
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 ,
first
 of all
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public took him to the hospital
for
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to
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get
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cure
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a cure
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 by
doctors
. Wherever,
people
who
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have illnesses, they try to get prescribed by
clinicians
.
For instance
,
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the
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public
try
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tries
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 to get healthy tips and advice
to
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being
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a
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healthy
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health
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 and
fitness
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in
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daily
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a daily
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lifetime
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.
For example
,
currently
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,currently
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whole
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the whole
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world
 faced covid-19 deadly disease
and
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doctors
 have done
best
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the best
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 health care services for patients and some
clinicians
 sacrificed their whole
life
 to tackle
with
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this
 serious issue
on
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at
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 that time. Unless
,
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doctors
 are not in our society, we will not have
chance
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a chance
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 to protect our
life
 from diseases. In conclusion, I assume, mechanics and
clinicians
 act as
a
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 main role in our human community. Admittedly,
these
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both sectors have done
their
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a
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 great job
for
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of
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development
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developing
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 in society. Whenever
,
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 not only
doctors
 are precious characters in
this
world
 but
also
 inventors.
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