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Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say causes and what effect this has on the individual and society in general.

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Nowadays,
people
 have stopped giving their
time
 to activities. There are many different reasons behind it. I think it has a detrimental impact on society and an individual. In
further
, writing I am going to discuss the potential causes and their effects.
First
 of all, in today's modern world everyone is trying to make a living.
People
 are spending so much
time
 at
work
 that they don't get enough
time
 for leisure activities.
For instance
, if one is living far away from
work
, commuting from
work
 consumes so much
time
 that they don't have a moment to spend on anything else afterwards.
Furthermore
, In the modern, world everyone has a mobile phone and social sites. These social media sites are very addictive and engaging that a one can spend hours on them and wouldn't know.
Instead
 of giving
time
 to their
people
 would rather spend
time
 on games etc. I believe that not pursuing your
hobbies
 has made
people
 more stressed and unfocused.
Therefore
, less productive and inefficient at
work
.
Furthermore
, if one does not give enough
time
 to relax their body and mind it affects their socializing and relationship with their family and friends. In conclusion, it is vital to give
time
 to your
hobbies
.
People
 should maintain a balance between
work
 and
hobbies
.
People
 with
hobbies
 tend to be more productive and content.
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