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The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Housing shortage in cosmopolitan cities can be attributed to two main factors: insufficient supply of residentials
areas
 and rapid surge of population. The
government
, having the highest authority, has a pivotal role in regulating supply of houses to
citizens
.
Thus
, I firmly believe it is only through
government
 led movement that alleviation of the problem could be realised. Some may propose that land developers and
citizens
 have a role in aggravating the housing problems: developers can accelerate the process of building housing estates, while
citizens
 can move to
areas
further
 away from city centre to reduce the congestion. Of course, these would rely on their conscience, which is often lacking. Who wouldn’t want to live in the proximity of their workplace or school, with all the shops and daily necessities in place? My friend,
for instance
, prefered to live in Sydney in a tiny flat as she felt it was extremely convenient, rather than go back to suburban
areas
 which was remote and isolated. With the
government
’s policy in place, giving monetary incentives or welfare rewards to those who comply with increasing residential supply, the scheme would be much more efficient. It is crystal clear that the
government
 has the highest power to enact changes in society. They can design policies to ensure adequate supply of land is provided for residential use, as well as putting a limit to the population rise,
therefore
 reaching a balance between man and space. Singapore is a glaring example, where the authorities have put together reasonably priced and spacious public housing estates for its
citizens
 in the past decades, relieving the pressure on living space. Hong Kong,
on the contrary
, without
such
 large scale public housing plans in place, finds itself constantly lacking in quality apartments to house the needy. Without the officials led change, it is extremely difficult and inefficient to ease the pressure on housing supply.
Therefore
, in my opinion,
government
 support and action is the only way out for the paucity of living
areas
 in large urban
areas
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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