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Over the past few decades, technological appliances have increasingly become common features inclass. Context, many people worry that this may lead to the disappearance of traditional educators?to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Today. the advancement of
technology
 leads to many people thinking that the
technology
 wants to get the place of
teachers
, definitely,
this
 is never happening,
technology
 wants to help the
teachers
 in education, in my opinion, I disagree with
this
 topic. On the one hand, there are many reasons that proved that the
technology
 can not get the place of
teachers
,
furthermore
, the human-invented that for
this
 reason that we had a better life than before,
in addition
, the
teacher
 can help from
technology
 in their work,
otherwise
, the
technology
 does not have the ability for control the children,
also
,
this
 matter not only need the
teacher
's management but
also
 the
technology
 is unpredictable,
for example
,
technology
 may get suffer a problem or suddenly break down.
however
, we use
technology
 in their life more and more but they can not able to make decisions, as well as, we always need a guide to help us with different issues, and overall the
technology
 has a limited data for helping children and the
technology
 does not have the ability to communicate, all of these reasons lead to we can not choose
technology
instead
 of
teacher
,
also
, the
teacher
 should be present at school due to increase class discipline. In conclusion,
technology
 is a tool for improving the level of our life, and
this
 comparison is completely wrong, in my idea,
teachers
 are a very necessary item for every school that they do not have an alternative.
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