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Some people think that criminal behaviour can have genetic reasons, while others believe that only circumstances can lead some people to crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Five years ago, when I was studying for a university entrance
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, a terrible problem happened to me that caused me a huge psychological burden. Today, I will tell you about that incident and how I overcame it. In the 12th grade, I was under psychological pressure for over 9 months before the university entrance
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 and 3 days before the
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 day, I slipped and fell on the floor. I broke my leg and lost consciousness. My parents thought I would miss
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 until I woke up one day before the
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 started. I was placed in an
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 room with a huge cast leg and an empty head with pain. It was really horrible for me and my family at the time. I tried to regain my composure and did my best in the
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 room. Fortunately, while the proctor distributed the
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 questions, I was able to regain my composure and remember the help of my teachers and family, along with the effort of each previous day of study. In the end, I tried to remember what I had learned before and I overcame that adversity and got into a pretty good university. After that, I told myself that personal adversities or big troubles in the future could neither be predicted nor avoided. The only thing we can do is face it and do our best to deal with it. That's the truth of my life, how about you?
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