You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visit you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to draw your attention to the issue I have faced in the swimming pool recently. I am Samane, one of the Diver's club members in

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weekend, I noticed that a great number of people had swarmed to swim, which is inevitable due to summer vacations. I couldn't believe my eyes! There weren't enough lockers for the swimmers and hardly could I step inside the pool, let alone dive or swim. Deafening shouts and noises all around us had turned the place rather into a battlefield! Not surprisingly, everything was out of the staff's control.

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they were doing their best by assigning each section to one person in charge, the demands were less likely to meet. I would like to respectfully suggest that you put a limit on the number of

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attendees per hour, as well as extend the working hours. I mean, opening earlier, closing later

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can increase your sales and revenues. Greater demand generates revenue, but it

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generates a need for more work hours. I hope you address these concerns as soon as possible. Sincerely yours

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

192 words

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You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visit you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Below is a chart showing how many hours per week the average person spent on various kinds of media,including watching TV,surfing on the internet,listening to the radio,and reading printed material.The years covered are from 1990 to 2005.

In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that it is the responsibility of the government to solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around.

In the future all cars ,buses,and trucks will be driverless .the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers . Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outhwight the disadvantage ?