The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, with the permanent
use
of mobile phones
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there are some who compare their
use
with smoking in social contexts,
therefore
as smoking is forbidden in many places they opine that equal measures should be taken with mobile phones.
However
, in my opinion, there is no point in common between those two,
therefore
I totally disagree with the idea and
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this
essay will explain my reasons.
To begin
, smoking is an activity that not only affects the active individual's health but
also
the community's because the smoke produced goes to the lounges of everyone doing several
damages
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. For
this
reason, when someone is doing it, he or she is
also
impacting people that even never
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met.
For example
, if someone who really looks after their health is having a
coffe
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coffee
every morning
next
to a smoker, all the efforts that the
first
person has been doing for keeping healthy are being affected and in the future will see consequences, in my
opinion
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such
an unfair
circunstance
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circumstance
circumstances
.
on the other hand
, the
use
of a phone either permanently or eventually affects only the user, it will probably affect their social skills, their vision as well as their attention processes, but the people surrounding them do not have any affectation,
thus
, the community wellbeing remains intact and without any
repercution
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repercussion
repercussions
.
Moreover
, the manipulation of these
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dispositions
do
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not export any smell or substance that can bother others and
this
could be
such
a big difference,
for instance
, no one wants to get a table with the putrid smell of
cigarrette
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cigarette
cigarettes
in a restaurant. to conclude, in my
opinion
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it does not have
sense
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to ban phones in the same way that
cigarretes
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cigarettes
because the consequences when using each one are absolutely different.
Hence
, while the
use
of mobiles is negative only for the people
who
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choices to do it, smoking develops undesirable consequences
also
for those who are around and for that reason the problem with
smooking
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smoking
is stronger and more
perjuditial
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prejudicial
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • antisocial
  • social interactions
  • negative impacts
  • banning
  • regulated
  • completely banned
  • education
  • awareness campaigns
  • responsible
  • mobile phone use
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