Educating young people is naturally important. However, some think governments ought to invest more education for adults in need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that

education

is a necessity for many individuals, especially adults who are less

priviledged

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privileged

. Even though it is vital to invest in

education

for grown-ups, I believe that policymakers should not spend too much on it and firms should be involved as well.

To begin

with, intense

competitions

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in

workplace

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have rendered many employees' skills outdated. If

governments

did not provide more training

courses

to upgrade their skills, these people would be

structually

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structurally

unemployed in the near future. On top of that, many working adults who are having financial difficulties could not afford to attend

courses

to improve their competitiveness.

This

is because the cost of living has risen over the past decades,

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families already struggle to make both ends meet. Few families have financial resources to spend on enrichment

courses

.

Therefore

,

governments

have the responsibility to offer subsidies to cover parts of the course fees and make

courses

more accessible for the mass.

However

, I believe that it is crucial to strike a balance between

education

for adults and other priorities. Considering that

governments

' budget is limited. Overspending on adult

education

will jeopardise the development of other sectors.

For example

, healthcare, transport and environment sectors are equally important to

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society. If there are

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grants available for these areas, the public's needs will not be well accommodated. On top of that, it is critical to mandate private enterprises to share the financial burden of adult

education

.

Governments

could make it compulsory and forces private companies to send their employees for enrichment programmes,

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firms will face penalties. Ultimately, they are one of the beneficiaries of a more productive workforce. In conclusion, while it is true that

governments

are obligated to allocate more resources to providing more

courses

to sharpen people's skills, I argue that

this

approach may be a success at the expense of other fields.

Also

,

governments

should require employers to share the burden since they

also

benefit from enrichment programmes.