You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, more and more countries have legalized
the
homosexual Correct article usage
apply
marriage
. However
, some people
still
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are still
concern
about whether Wrong verb form
concerned
same sex
Add a hyphen
same-sex
marriage
should be legal. Although
some people
think that legalizing gay marriage
affects our society
negatively, I believe it is a natural trend and right for people
to choose their marriage
types;
First
of all, introducing law
of legalizing Correct article usage
a law
same sex
Add a hyphen
same-sex
mariage
can help Correct your spelling
marriage
develope
and transmit the information that everyone is the same. Correct your spelling
develop
This
means that government conceives gays are
as Unnecessary verb
apply
same
as Correct article usage
the same
public
. Correct article usage
the public
For many
parents, they think that Change preposition
Many
children
may be affected by this
law and fall in love with Add a hyphen
same-gender
same
gender person. Correct article usage
the same
However
, many researches
have published that homosexuality is controlled by Correct your spelling
researchers
natural
Add an article
a natural
gene
. It is hard to change Fix the agreement mistake
genes
ones
sexual orientation just because governments legalize Change noun form
one's
gays
Change the noun form
gay
marriage
.
In addition
, in modern society
, since more and more people
Add a missing verb
are concern
concern
about human rights, it is a natural trend that Wrong verb form
concerned
people
should have same
Correct article usage
the same
marriage
right to choose whom they want to marry. In sepecific
, gays now can marry each other with legal Correct your spelling
specific
right
Fix the agreement mistake
rights
instead
of only one male and one female can become legal
couple. Add an article
a legal
Moreover
, legalizing gay marriage
helps young
generation Correct article usage
the young
develope
open-minded that everyone is equal and no one should be judged by their sexual orientation.
Correct your spelling
develop
develops
Last
but not least, some people
think that legalizing gay marriage
may lead to the
decline Correct article usage
a
of
Change preposition
in
birth
rate since they cannot give rise to their own kids. Correct article usage
the birth
However
, gay couples can adopt children
that were abandoned by their parents and give them a good family condition to grow. Furthermore
, since they have experienced discrimination before, they would teach their children
in a more open-minded way.
To sum up, I firmly believe that sam
sex Correct your spelling
same
marriage
is a good opportunity for the development of the
Correct article usage
apply
society
. Indeed, it not only makes children
more open-minded, which helps create a more friendly society
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
gives those abandoned kids an environment to live in.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
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