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Nature has a more significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nature
 has a greater
influence
 on
adult
 human
intelligence
 than upbringing. I agree with
this
 opinion because I think that genes
has
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 a crucial role in human development. The IQ level of parents is transmitted to an
adult
, but environmental factors affect the child whether the child correctly inherits the cognitive and mental abilities of the parent. The level of
brain
 development,
brain
 capacity and memory can be inherited by
nature
. But the
further
 development of the
brain
 and intellect of an
adult
 depends on the work of the
adult
 himself.
For example
, there are twins and if you check their studies,
then
 obviously they will be different, but at the
beginning
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 they were born the same. Scientists conduct many experiments with adults and their study showed that for adults, the
influence
 of genetics becomes even stronger: with a probability of 80%, the IQ will be the same as that of parents. Education does not necessarily affect the
intelligence
 of an
adult
. Based on the fact that genetic engineering is developing, genetic technologies can change the
nature
 of a person, thereby affecting the
intelligence
 of an
adult
.
For example
, genetic geniuses or scientists can change some of the chromosomes of a naturally inherited
adult
 or modify the neurons of the
brain
. At the moment, an international expert in the field of genetics Harpal
Marpal
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Marple
 has successfully conducted experiments to change human
nature
, thereby proving that upbringing does not affect the
intelligence
 of an
adult
.
For
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 conclusion, the
influence
 of
nature
 is much more significant than the
influence
 of nurture. The main reason for
this
 is that there are alternative methods
besides
 education,
moreover
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 the
adult
 has limits that are difficult to cross only by using nurture
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