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the following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in dubai in recent decades

the following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in dubai in recent decades
#maps #show #changes #place #dubai #decades
these two maps illustrate that
,
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 in recent decades
on
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one
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 of the roundabout in
dubai
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Dubai
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 has changed dramatically. in the past, there
was
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 few towers around the
squere
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square
although
 these days there are many buildings around that, looking at the map of
dubai
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Dubai
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 today, it looks more residential,
city
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 has been more crowded and many green areas are removed.
however
, some trees have been added near the roundabout.
furthermore
, many buildings are constructed as opposed
as
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 the building which is on the
north west
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northwest
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 of the roundabout was
demalished
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demolished
. what is
more
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 is that
because of
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the people who
lives
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 in those apartment routes are more crowded than 10 years ago.
in particular
, many things have been the same since
this
 period
time
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of time
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.
for example
, the clock tower in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of the roundabout has not changed any more and still been there. more over
a
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an
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 empty
spaces
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space
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on
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in
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 the south of the
squere
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square
 has
been existed
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existed
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in contrast
of
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to
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 the north of that.
overall
, these maps depict that
this
 area has changed
significantlly
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significantly
 since 10 years ago.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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