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oday more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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In recent years, the number of travelling around the world has been increasing. The main reason why
people
 are going to travel more is the fact that the price of
transportation
 is cheap and
advantages
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 of travelling
is
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are
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 that it can help in creativity enhancement and letting
people
 try new things. Looking
first
 at the primary reason,
people
 are likely to travel due to the lower price of
transportation
. There are a lot of cheap
transports
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transport
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 provided nowadays and
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a low
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low cost
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 flight is a good example of
this
. In the past, getting on an
airplane
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aeroplane
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 was considered
as
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the
transportation
 for
elite
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the elite
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.
Therefore
, only
few
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people
traveled
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travelled
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 around the world.
In contrast
, recently many
low cost
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 airlines have provided super extreme tickets which do not cost any dollars.
This
 would make
people
 buy tickets more even though they do not have plans to go anywhere. Turning to the advantages of travelling,
people
 would be more creative. During travelling,
people
 may experience a lot of
people
, buildings, and situations which could influence and inspire them to get new ideas associated with their works.
Moreover
, travelling is a way that let
people
 be out of their comfort zone.
People
 usually try new activities because they think that it is the only
once
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one
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 in their lives.
For example
, sky driving may be
the
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a
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 horrible dream for many
people
 but travelling in Canada force
people
 to try
this
 and it has become one of their
favorite
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favourite
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 activities. In conclusion,
people
 nowadays travel a lot and
this
 is because
the
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 lower price of
transportation
.
In addition
, the main advantage
people
 will get from travelling is improving their creativities and giving opportunities to experience new things.
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