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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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In the past years ago, the development of urbanisation has
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grown considerably together with the demand
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 habitats. In
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, the environmental resources are used in order to
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 needs. These actions likely lead to many problems ;
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 in global temperature,
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, drought, etc. .
People
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 sometimes don't know what are they doing and how it affects the surrounding atmosphere.
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clear communication from someone who has enough authority must take charge in
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.
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 plays
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and
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 important role to deal with the environmental
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problem
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government
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 is the one who has
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a power to issue some strict measures and make
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declaration
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 about the
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. There are
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plenty of conveying methods to aware
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 of the problems;
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some countries decide to include
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 any materials composed of carbon.
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 action could lead to environmental
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 awareness in advance in
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. Another way is to simply broadcast. Even though
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government
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 has done
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, it is useless if
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 still use the same daily life as before.
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 could enhance the
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 measure by using public transportation than
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vehicle
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, filtering water before
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 in the canal. In conclusion, The environmental issues
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 been
occured
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occurred
occupied
 for a while by human activities.
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 ,but
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 of us.
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 we need to express our responsibility together in order to
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 the disaster.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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