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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

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First
 introduced some forty years ago,
computers
 have since gone from strength to strength. Nowadays, most of our jobs are based on
computers
 and many of our daily routines are computer-assisted. Some people are worried about the future of human beings, arguing that
computers
 will take over us.
However
, I believe that their expansion into everyday life is extremely beneficial. As
time
 goes by, computer technology is developing more and more. Its pace is
also
 increasing. Many things that we used to do by ourselves are now done fully or semi-automatically by
computers
.
For instance
, people once washed their clothes with their hands,
however
, these days with the help of smart washing machines they can plan the device to start washing according to their daily schedule.
Therefore
, It’s my belief that almost all of the devices that we have in our houses today, will be smart one day so that they will take care of our tasks without us knowing.
This
 can ease our daily lives and give us more
time
 to engage in our more important interests. Suppose your fridge can understand the shortage of specific foods,
then
 it can order them online and
this
 way you wouldn’t need to bother spending
time
 going out and shopping. Another plus point of
this
 development is that we can perform many tasks at work or study in a very small amount of
time
 and with higher accuracy.
Hence
, it is necessary to invest in computer technology as it has a huge capacity for handling complex tasks. By way of a conclusion, I think
computers
 will develop to be more efficient and smaller in size so that they will be inside every object in our surroundings which will ease us in our daily
time
-consuming chores.
Also
, we can take advantage of them in assisting with our more difficult problems.
This
 is clearly more of a positive than a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Machine Learning
  • Automated
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • Telecommuting
  • Digital Technology
  • Virtual Workplaces
  • Computer-assisted
  • Healthcare Industry
  • Reliance
  • Privacy
  • Human Interaction
  • Job Displacement
  • Automation
  • Digital Divide
  • Cybersecurity
  • Internet Safety
  • Digital Crime
  • Ethical Considerations
  • Environmental Impacts
  • E-waste
  • Carbon Footprint
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