Sarah Goodwin∗ , Yigal Attali∗ , Geoffrey T. LaFlair∗ , Yena Park∗ , Andrew Runge∗ , Alina A. von Davier∗ , Kevin P. Yancey

is irrefutable that
crime
is burgeoning day by day in many countries. Many
people
are scared to go away from their
home
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because of
crime
. Some
people
contend that
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of ways can be used to prevent
crime
.
While
other
people
argue that nothing can be done to prevent it. I believe that it is possible to tackle
this
serious issue by taking some action.
Firstly
, some
people
do not want to leave their
home
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because they think that they are secure only in their homes. They feel that if they go out of their
home
then
they may be affected by
crime
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like chain
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snatches
, murder, kidnapping etc. One approach would be to increase the number of police on roads. lf more police were on the streets, whether on foot or on patrol cars, criminals would be less likely to commit
crime
and
people
would feel much safer. Having more police
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at night would be particularly beneficial. A second possibility would be to make laws stricter and punishments more severe.
This
could involve increasing fines or lengthening prison sentences.
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If
a criminal has to pay more money for doing something illegal or would have to face more time in prison
then
I believe
this
is likely to reduce the
crime
rate.
On the other hand
, some
people
are frightened to leave their
home
because they feel that if they are not present in their
home
then
their
home
is not safe from
crime
. To solve
this
problem, methods to increase security might deter potential criminals.
For example
, more effective alarm devices can be used in houses. Technology is so advanced nowadays that the alarm could ring on your mobile device if someone
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your
home
.
This
would reduce burglary and theft.
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addition, hidden security cameras like surveillance cameras can be used in homes with the help of which
people
can watch what is happening in their homes from anywhere.
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this
way one can feel secure about one's
home
.
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conclusion,
although
crime
is a major problem in most cities in the world, the situation can be addressed by adopting the methods mentioned above.
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It
would definitely be wrong to say that nothing can be done to address
this
problem.
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