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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products for instance, clothing and medicines. to what exten do you agree or disagree.

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There has been much discussion lately regarding the subject of using
animals
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 for
products
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,
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 as clothes, medicines etc, some assert that animal
products
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 should be banned but others believe the contrary, I am of the view that
livestock
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products
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 are the foundation of human food but product in other lines should be considered having a substitute. Humans have had a long history of using
animals
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 for meat, milk and eggs, and countless
people
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 on the globe work in
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 sector. It is true that it is possible for humans to consume a diet free of
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products
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, but the cost of the replacement might be too expensive for everyone to get.
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, these
products
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 contain a huge amount of nutrients, including protein, calcium carbohydrates, vitamins etc. so it is quite likely that most
people
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 will not be able to afford a diet with no relation to the
livestock
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 industry.
Livestock
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products
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 and their industry have allowed millions of
products
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 to be made, affordable and efficient. It has helped feed thousands, and provided
people
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 in difficult economic situations to afford the basics of life without these
products
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 the social-economic system would collapse, causing a world crisis,
people
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 would have to reconstruct the food and product supply system, and overall the cost would be tremendous. Nearly every medical breakthrough has resulted directly in research using
animals
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. Animal research has contributed to major advances in understanding and treating illnesses. Since
animals
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 have similar biological features to humans, scientists can use
animals
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 to test the safety and effectiveness of newly developed drugs
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 and be given relatively reliable results.
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, sometimes closer examination would show that there are many volunteers that are willing to experience the experiments and research institutes and glad to offer payment. To conclude, in most cases,
animals
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 provide the best solution to problems, but in some ,circumstances alternatives can be found.
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