Some people think that the government should give financial support to artists such as musicians, painters and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There has been always
art
since humanity is created. Some people believe that
art
should be supported by
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government
goverment
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financialy
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financially
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,
other
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others
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believe that it is not
nessesary
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necessary
for
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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to
support
musicians,
patinters
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painters
and poets. I strongly believe that supporting
art
has to be
the
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one of
goverment's
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government's
duties.
Art
is
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everywhere
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everwhere
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everywhere
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in life. Whenever we
listen
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a song or a short poem or see a
paint
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painting
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, we all know that these are
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a piece
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piece
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pieces
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of
art
.
Art
gives us
a
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idea that makes us able to see
the
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things from
different
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a different
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perspective
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perspectives
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. In
this
case,
art
is something so valuable that we can not find anything to switch. If
countries
want to go
further
in science or
anyfield
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any field
to do better,
goverments
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governments
government
should
support
artists.
That is
not something that we can do it
individualy
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individually
individual
. Due to
this
reason, financial
support
should be given to
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the artist
an artist
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artist
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artists
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by
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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. Without that
support
,
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the artist
an artist
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artist
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artists
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wouldn't able to be more productive.
Therefore
lack of
art
would occur in society ,
eventually
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those societies couldn't be able to be more creative and proactive in
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the field
a field
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field
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such
as physics, chemistry or biology. In
other
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way,
who
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those who
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believe that supporting
artist
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artists
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would be
waste
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a waste
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of money for
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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are mostly from uneducated and poor
countries
. These
countyries
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countries
are far away from civilisation and lack
of
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knowledge in some
field
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fields
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like medicine .
However
, these
countries
do not have enough money to
support
their artists. Musicians, painters or poets who live in poor
contries
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countries
wouldn't be productive enough, the way how they
realy
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really
want to be. At
this
point,
reach
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rich
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countries
may prefer to
support
poor
countries
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countries'
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artists for all our good. As long as
goverments
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governments
government
are being supportive
financialy
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financially
in any field of
art
, productivity, creativity,
civilisation
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and civilisation
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will increase and at that point humanity raise their concern on
art
more and more to have to do better in science,
technologh
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technology
, literature and so on.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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