Some people think that the government should give financial support to artists such as musicians, painters and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There has been always
art
since humanity is created. Some people believe that
art
should be supported by
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government
goverment
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financialy
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financially
financial
,
other
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others
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believe that it is not
nessesary
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necessary
for
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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to
support
musicians,
patinters
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painters
and poets. I strongly believe that supporting
art
has to be
the
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one of
goverment's
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government's
duties.
Art
is
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everywhere
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everwhere
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everywhere
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in life. Whenever we
listen
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a song or a short poem or see a
paint
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painting
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, we all know that these are
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a piece
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piece
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pieces
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of
art
.
Art
gives us
a
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idea that makes us able to see
the
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things from
different
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a different
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perspective
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perspectives
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. In
this
case,
art
is something so valuable that we can not find anything to switch. If
countries
want to go
further
in science or
anyfield
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any field
to do better,
goverments
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governments
government
should
support
artists.
That is
not something that we can do it
individualy
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individually
individual
. Due to
this
reason, financial
support
should be given to
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the artist
an artist
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artist
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artists
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by
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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. Without that
support
,
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the artist
an artist
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artist
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artists
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wouldn't able to be more productive.
Therefore
lack of
art
would occur in society ,
eventually
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those societies couldn't be able to be more creative and proactive in
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the field
a field
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field
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such
as physics, chemistry or biology. In
other
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way,
who
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those who
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believe that supporting
artist
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artists
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would be
waste
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a waste
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of money for
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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are mostly from uneducated and poor
countries
. These
countyries
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countries
are far away from civilisation and lack
of
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apply
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knowledge in some
field
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fields
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like medicine .
However
, these
countries
do not have enough money to
support
their artists. Musicians, painters or poets who live in poor
contries
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countries
wouldn't be productive enough, the way how they
realy
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really
want to be. At
this
point,
reach
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rich
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countries
may prefer to
support
poor
countries
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countries'
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artists for all our good. As long as
goverments
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governments
government
are being supportive
financialy
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financially
in any field of
art
, productivity, creativity,
civilisation
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and civilisation
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will increase and at that point humanity raise their concern on
art
more and more to have to do better in science,
technologh
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technology
, literature and so on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Government funding
  • Cultural preservation
  • Economic development
  • Financial stability
  • Nurture talent
  • Innovation
  • Diverts resources
  • Critical services
  • Art market
  • Personal merit
  • Mediocrity
  • Dependency
  • Patrons
  • Sponsorship
  • Private funding
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