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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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Travelling by own vehicle is becoming increasingly serious in many nations.
Although
 it causes plenty of threats to the environment owing to the emitting co2 and air pollution, its
effects
 can
also
 be combated successfully by promoting public transport.
This
 essay looks at some of the problems caused by a private motor in society and suggests some solutions to the problems. ……………. causes multiple problems. The …………….
effects
 are very obvious.
For example
, ……………. In some cases,
such
 as ……………. even leads to (death). The
second
 effect is …………….
People
 who ……………. become …………….
However
, the menace of ……………. can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle
this
 issue.
People
 need to be aware of the
effects
 so that they can avoid
this
 problem.
In addition
, the government could
also
 ……………..
This
 is a good approach because ……………. In conclusion, ……………. is a serious issue because it causes harmful
effects
 on
people
’s health and
people
 who are ……………. The best approaches to deal with it are to educate
people
 about its damaging
effects
, and
also
 for the government to ……………..
Although
 the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term there are concrete steps to reduce the
effects
 it is having on the current society. [about 175 words]
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