Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
teenagers
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should do unpaid
community
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work
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in their leisure
time
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and some
people
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think that it has benefits both
teenagers
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and society.
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I firmly disagree with those who think that
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beneficial for both of them. Some
people
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have different views
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whether to allow young
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to
work
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for
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community
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the community
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for free or not. They believe that
teenagers
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working in a
community
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can learn something new
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, how to
work
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in a team or they can be taught
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experienced
people
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to be ready for
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in
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years.
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, It has
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benefit
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for
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community
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the community
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to have
extra
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an extra
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work-force
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workforce
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which is not required to pay
salary
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and having saved some money , the money can be sent by
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to improve the quality of facilities or
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the environment
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.
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,
people
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believe that it has not only profitable for
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but
also
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beneficial for young
people
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.
However
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, I would argue with those who think that
teenagers
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should do unpaid
work
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in their free
time
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.
This
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is because I think that both girls and boys have had already enough tasks in school and so they do not need to
work
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in their leisure
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.
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, not all youth are keen on
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work
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for free and
therefore
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they should be unmotivated to do
community
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work
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.
Instead
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, young
people
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would like to spend their
time
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taking courses or doing hobbies.
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, a teenager interested in reading books
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to think
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and
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than
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others.All in all, we should not take their
time
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by forcing them to
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in public.
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, we need to give
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chance to look forward
them
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and decide what they want. To conclude, it is true that
teenagers
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can gain some benefits working in
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community
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while I believe that they should not
work
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in their free
time
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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