Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small and local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,

the

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widespread of

supermakets

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supermarkets

in some nations many small local businesses are at risk of disappearing. While it is believed that the collapse of

this

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these

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local

shops

will cause a significant impact on society, I indeed hold that

this

type of work is

livelyhood

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livelihood

of many families, so its closure will mean the backward evolvement of many

communities

.

Firstly

, a lot of developed countries

completly

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completely

embraced the rapid expansion of big

shops

and consider them as a way of showing their development in

this

field.

Moreover

, Supermarkets are likely to have cheaper prices, and they are deemed to be more convenient, where a person can find all his desired items in one place

instead

of going around multiple small

shops

.

However

,

this

colossal development overshadowed stores, a small

business

which many families gain their wage from

this

kind of work, resulting in the rise of an

unemployement

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unemployment

rates in local

communities

which can affect the economic growth as well.

Secondly

,

this

new trend is a threat to

may

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many

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shops'

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shops

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owners and

for

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to

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those who are willing to start a new

business

as well.

In other words

, Supermarkets raised the standards of marketing that many young adults can't handle and are too afraid to risk and

lunsh

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launch

lunch

a

business

that is

condamned

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condemned

to fail before its start.

This

means that local

communities

are

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losing

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loosing

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losing

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their brains and the chance to develop.

For example

, many youngsters are leaving their hometowns in the hope of finding better

oportunities

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opportunities

elseswhere

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elsewhere

.

Therefore

,

this

new development doesn't only break the

ambitious

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of many young people to own a

business

but it

also

affects the

societies

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thrive

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. In conclusion, the competition between Supermarkets and local businesses is unfear and overwhelming to small

businesses

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business

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owners. Some people, namely me, hold that

this

new culture is having

a counterproductive results

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counterproductive results

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on the local

communities

, leading to increased

unemployement

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unemployment

rates as well as

opressing

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oppressing

pressing

young

adults

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adults'

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dreams of starting a new

business

.