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Many people these days work from home rather than traveling to an office. What are the advantages and disadvantages of telecommuting?

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Some people prefer to
work
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 from home
instead
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 of going to an office.
Although
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 there are some advantages to working from distance,
this
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 trend entails several drawbacks as well. On the one hand, a
person
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 working from distance can gain benefits.
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, a
person
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 can
work
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 on a flexible schedule. That provides people with arranging
time
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a time
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 for doing hobbies and achieving
work
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-life balance. While people working at an office in the initial days can face accommodation and financial problems, others working remote jobs may save money on
such
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 issues, in turn, spending money for their own necessities.
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, the latter can be more time with their relatives and not struggle to manage their financial plans for their expenses.
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, even though telecommuting is becoming developing these days, there are numerous disadvantages to that. If a
person
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 telecommutes, they cannot submit their
work
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 on time and have to miss deadlines due to some causes. That element serves to reduce the quality of
work
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 and
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 affects not feeling pressure at
work
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. Having not felt pressure, a
person
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 can have less responsibility in their job.
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, a conflict can arise between employees and employers. To conclude, it is true that
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 for remote
work
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 is growing nowadays. Even though a flexible schedule and
less
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fewer
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 expenses are good advantages for remote jobs than
traveling
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travelling
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 to an office, I believe that they both are the most essential
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apply
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these days.
This
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 is because there are their own good advantages.
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