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Many people believed that the high level of violence in films today is causing serious problems. What are the problems and how could they be reduced?

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It is believed that nowadays, violence-based movies have a detrimental impact on society and generate more crime. The majority of people criticized the filmmakers who are producing
films
 on criminal
stories
 and largely,
such
 crime scenes can imprint on the visual audience. In subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss how
media
 influences the public these days and what are the main reasons herein, and some recommendations to overcome them. Criminal activities have been rampant in many regions.
This
 fact is that many lands have been turned into disputed areas due to extreme violent situations. Why people are so offended?.
However
, people pointed out the
media
, especially
films
 which incite a criminal mentality in the public.
For instance
, movies and web series are based now on historical
stories
, wars, actions, and robbery-based
stories
such
 as Vikings, Kurlus Osman, Money heists e.g., becoming famous.
As a result
, audiences get impersonal from the dying heart favourite actor/ actress in these
films
 and they think of acting as they had watched in
films
. The film industry is a large lucrative market, and movie producers along with script-writers create bloodshed movies to gain profits rather than alleviate social problems.
Therefore
, the government should enforce the law and regulations on the censor board to take action and control the spread of
such
 violet material.
Finally
, the
media
 can sort out
this
 issue by filming script
stories
 on peace, friendship, and livelihood and can convey positive vibes in society. To conclude, film
media
 is an entertainment industry, their producers should have to produce valuable and interesting topic
stories
instead
 of violating the generation. If the government takes action against it, the film industry will play a better role by bringing awareness of the laws and legislation, and humanity to the audience through
films
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