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Some people say that schools do not do enough to teach young people about how to look after their health. Do you agree or disagree?

Most individuals are of the opinion that learning institutions rarely educate youngsters on personal healthcare. In my opinion,
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 partially agree because, while
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 is compulsory in some
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,it is considered irrelevant in other
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. On the one hand,several high
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 ensure that healthcare
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 is compulsory.
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education
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 and other related topics are taught as a subject in some
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 as a form of creating awareness on that topic.
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,in a school where
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 topics are considered essential,70 per cent of the students are constantly conscious of their well-being ,whereas ,the adoption of
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 creates an impact on each individual.
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 ,it shouldn't be a distraction
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 what the main purpose of
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 entails in general.
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,it is perceived as irrelevant. Other subjects like mathematics,business studies and computer studies, are considered
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more insightful and educative than educating children about how to take care of their
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,the instructor's attention is focused on the goal.
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,students of these
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 tend to miss out on the importance of maintaining
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good personal hygiene .
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,in my opinion,creating
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 awareness in
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 important and should not be scrapped out completely in an educational platform.
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 the importance should be widely spread by teachers.
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,
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 should help in ensuring that topics related to
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 ground,which will result
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 its significance
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 spread in the society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health education
  • Curriculum
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Diet
  • Exercise
  • Mental health
  • Hygiene
  • Practical skills
  • Responsibility
  • Collaboration
  • Long-term benefits
  • Reduced healthcare costs
  • Academic performance
  • Well-being
  • Comprehensive health programs
  • Positive outcomes
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