Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

whenever we face something negativities in our
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unfortunate while others oppose that it is wise to find solutions in response to the betterment.
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making an attempt to overcome challenges and for upgrading the standard of
life
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as well as economic strength.
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improvement and consider
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good times will definitely come one day after passing hard periods.To
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have given
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for getting a job opportunity in that sector but didn't qualify in written exam.
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consider
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again.
likewise
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situation.
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rather dependent on fortune merely.
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there is no way to shortcut,
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after so many failures and can cope
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with monetary shortfalls to some extent.Take innovation as an example,whenever scientists discovered something new earlier they didn't
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.After so many trials on their experiments
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they manage to be
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.concur with other people,I believe endeavour is the key to success.
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,we should try our level best to build up our surroundings much better. To sum up,it is best to try our forehead at least after going through some bad moments so that we can move towards
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betterment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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