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Should parents read or tell stories to their children or should the children be encouraged to read books, watch movies or TV all by themselves? Which point of view do you agree with?

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 and teenagers are always fond of tales.
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 is one of the key reasons why many
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 tell/read them bedtime stories. Whether the guardian should narrate stories for their kid or they should be left to watch TV/movies, has been one of the most debated topics
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recent times. Some people would argue that storytelling creates a great bonding between
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children
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children
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 can never become self-dependent. In
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parents
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 who narrate tales to their
children
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 spend more time with them, as compared to those who don't.
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 in a way strengthens their relationship.
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, research around the world has shown that
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 are more attached to those individuals who spend more time with them.
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, it is quite apparent that storytelling does play a key role in relationship building between
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children
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 and their
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, some argue that telling stories and in turn, spending more time with the kids does make them dependent on their
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; the
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 who can keep themselves busy with books, movies etc. can adjust themselves in isolation from their
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 if the situation demands so.
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, it will help them grow personally and make them self-dependent. After analysing both
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aspects of
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 argument, it is quite evident that storytelling makes
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 highly dependent on their
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. But the effects it has on relationship building is something which cannot be neglected.
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, it can be concluded that storytelling is very rewarding in terms of building relationships and every parent should indulge themselves in it. It is
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 believed that in the coming future more and more
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 will realise the importance of storytelling and will engage themselves with their kids
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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