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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research,business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Sharing had become one of the most important concepts when humans decided to live as a society
however
 the concept of sharing in the fast-paced technology age has been redefined which means sharing is more about
information
 than other things like food etc. Many
people
 believe that it is vital for everyone to have access to different
information
such
 as scientific research, business and the academic world
however
 some
people
 disagree. In my opinion, we must have limitations for sharing some
information
. There are many drawbacks when anyone accesses any
information
. The
first
 disadvantage is interpreting which means many
people
 misinterpret
information
 in the scientific
and
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business and academic world and they tend to exaggerate results,
for example
, there were some cases
people
 linked the result to a sign for apocalyptic. The
second
 drawback is when
people
 use social media more and more it is hard to believe which
information
 is right and wrong, on top of that, a group of
people
 can use the
information
 for their interests. One significant reason why sharing
information
 is vital is everyone has a right to know and no one has a right to prevent
this
 freedom. Many projects in every country are maintained and most of them have funds for their project derived from the government,
therefore
,
people
 must know their taxes invested in what projects and whether the result of these projects has benefits society or not. Overall, sharing is an arguable topic among
people
however
, in my opinion, the disadvantages of sharing scientific results and the business and academic world by far are more than the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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