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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people. Why is this the case?What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, despite the objectively demonstrated importance of lifelong learning, the belief that innate intellect (thinking skills) is sufficient for a successful existence has taken hold in
people
's thoughts.
This
 essay will discuss
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the significance of lifelong learning and why
people
 think that it is enough to have
a
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standard human
knowledge
 in
life
. In today's world, there is an abundance of
knowledge
. New inventive technology
have
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 swept the globe, and everyone has an understanding of what innovation is.
The
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knowledge
 governs the world and the value of it and learning has sharply increased. Everyone who is successful has a lot of learning
experience
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. Some
people
 just have a high school diploma, while others have a bachelor's, master's, or doctorate degree. In fact, Literacy and learning have a significant impact in real
life
. Even if many "underachievers" go on to become millionaires, education is still required.
Life
 is a game of survival, and the smartest
people
 always come out on top. The definition of the word "clever" is interpreted differently in
this
 context. If any exact science has
basic
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 understanding,
that is
 a major plus for a bright future. Every person has a vocation, which he picks as a
life
 path and associates with
knowledge
. It's
alright
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 if you don't know enough about a subject you don't care about. The most important thing is to place yourself at the heart of
knowledge
.
Opportunity
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 to educate and to find information never
end
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, it has no boundaries. Neither does a person's potential. The human mind is very important in the realization of many things. Here we see different opinions, and I lean more toward the
first
 statement. The reason is that new changes require getting out of one's comfort zone. In many cases,
this
 is described by the endless acquisition of
knowledge
. It's better to work hard and have challenges than to be content with what you have and live without worries.
This
 world needs change to improve its quality,
people
 need to understand that. There will always be the problem of
knowledge
, you just need to know what's what and always be ready for new changes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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