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Transport preferences among young people from different countries.

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The bar chart illustrates the information about 3 different types of
transport
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 preferences of young
people
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 from 4 countries.The figures are given in terms of
percentage
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.   Overall,it is noticeable that
car
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 is the most chosen
transport
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,
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 is
on
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in
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 the
second
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 place and motorcycle is the least chosen
transport
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.   It is apparent that a
car
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 is the most chosen form of
transport
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 for young
people
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 in all countries, except Germany. The preference
of
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for
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 a
car
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 in Great Britain and
USA
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the USA
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 have the same
percentage
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.
Car
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 preference in Germany has dropped by 20% from 60% in Great Britain and the USA.
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, in Germany, the
percentage
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 of
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
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car
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cars
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 are roughly the same.  
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, in Great Britain and the USA, there is a huge difference between the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who choose some kind of
transport
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. It is clear that in France the highest
chosen
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choice
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 of young
people
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is
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in
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 a
car
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.
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, the gap between
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 in France is the smallest among all other countries.
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